Cheyenne stopped and said to Mark, “This is it; you’re only giving me two walls?”
“Why, do you need more? I thought I was taking a chance giving you two. In fact, I haven’t even been able to get you to use one wall recently.”She tapped her purse and said, “Well, I guess that means I’ll just have to cut back some on my choices.”
“What, you have more than two walls worth? Since when? And, speaking of since when, when are you going to stop carrying your flash card around in your purse? Just like today, you never know when someone will steal your purse. Why don’t you keep it locked up at home somewhere?”
“Because when it’s at home, I don’t know where it is. And, as you can see, the guy took my camera, not my purse.”“But why didn’t he take your bag?” Jonas asked.
“What do you mean?” she asked looking at him.“Why didn’t he take your bag? I’ve seen at least some of what’s in your bag, if that’s common for women to carry, why didn’t he take your bag?”
“I don’t know, he’s a camera freak?”
“A camera what?”
“Freak,” Mark answered giving him a confused look. “You don’t know what a freak is?”
“Of course he does, he just didn’t hear me, that’s all.” She smiled at them both and then turned away to look at the area Mark had set aside for her. “Yes, I think this will do well. I can cover the walls.”
Mark looked at him strangely one more time, then turned away and spoke with Cheyenne about the show, which apparently would occur on the eleventh. One day after she was scheduled to fly back to him; if, in fact, time were occurring parallel. And if time were running parallel, would he be able to keep her from stepping into the disturbance and dying?
And, if she did die again, he would surely return to his own time because he had no desire to stay here without her. Not that he wanted to be in his own time without her either.Chapter Seventeen
15 comments:
The camera is the key. It's got to be. It's too weird to have someone just randomly steal a camera when the purse is right there.
You can just feel things are going to that crossroad where Jonas will be forced to act to save the woman he loves.
I just had to mention, nice save about Jonas not hearing the "freak" comment.
A camera's always important to a photographer. ;) Hey, maybe they want to sell her stuff on Ebay. (Just kidding.)
Well, it is July 6, and there is a ticking clock in this story. Time will tell. :D
Thanks, I was trying to make Jonas feel out of place, and yet show that Cheyenne cares enough to realize it and help out.
Poor Jonas! He's a fish out of water, especially with all this crazy lingo flying around. ;)
I'm definitely getting the sense that we're nearing something...
He couldn't stay locked up at Cheyenne's forever, the real world was waiting to knock him down a bit. But Jonas is nothing if not a survivor who gets what he wants. :D
Yup, tick, tock. I love ticking clock stories, but they can also be a bit hard to write because there's a time limit on how long you can drag something out. :D
Oh my....
what will happen next?
is the camera really the key?
I don't think so...
I really doubt she would have in her purse anything worth more than $5000, I would have gone for the camera as well... why would you take the purse when you can have a $5000 camera!!! :D lol
anyway great story!!
Thank you Sandy, and you're absolutely right, any criminal with half a brain would *have* to know the camera was worth more than anything in her purse, since credit cards would be worthless almost immediately. Even if he didn't know the exact cost of the camera, he'd have to know it was expensive. :D
Thank you again.
I'm getting a sick feeling that Mark may somehow be not what he seems either. It was just so suspicious to me that he commented on the flash card...as though it should have been in the camera. Eh, maybe I'm just too suspicious.
I love a ticking clock myself! You've really tightened the screws here.
Well, trying to think like the camera snatcher, he could have just snatched both the bag and the camera LOL! Credit cards are a lot more flexible than a camera!
I love the banter between the three of them, the comment about "freak", and the fact that Jonas picked up on the oddity about taking the camera.
Time really is ticking now. You've got me worried about relativity and what happens if you change the past -- will Jonas even remember who Cheyenne is if he is able to save her?
Great writing and beautiful shots!
You know, Gayl, I love your theory. Mark is a bit slick, there's no doubt about that, but maybe he's just money grubbing. Time will tell.
Thank you, ticking clock stories are so hard to judge when to do what because you can't move too fast and you can't move too slow.
You know, S.B. grabbing both would have been a lot easier, hum...
Also, you know, the thief did come out of the gallery, that's interesting, huh?
Whoa, time travel has so many variables. When this is done, I will post my take on time travel that I used to write this story. :D
Thank you very much. This was the first time I didn't use the in-game camera. I do like it better, but I misjudged and cut off a few heads. :p
All caught up and I am truly enchanted. Agree with the others, the camera has some connection here, not sure what. Almost reminds me of that Star Trek episode "City on the Edge of Forever" I love this stuff!
Clock is ticking, he may have to save the woman he loves...or will it effect the future?
Still loving the interaction between them. Hey, A Victorian Gentleman with his courtly manners, but a seething cauldron of passion underneath, is hard to ignore,
great job Lachesis!!
Poor Jonas. You really have me wondering about a lot of things. Why was just the camera taken? And can they avoid the glimpse Jonas had into Cheyenne's future? I certainly hope so.
Drew, OMG, you're right, it is like Edith Keiler! I didn't even think of that. Poor Kirk. :(
Thank you! You know, it's been along time for Jonas, no wonder he'd have desires. I mean his wife had been dead a long time. :D
Good, Saoz, if you have questions, then I've done my job, as you very well know.
The future is a great unknown with many paths and if we diverge from one path, then another opens and where that leads is then a new question. Holy cow, I've been writing the elf characters at SoM too long, I'm starting to sound like them. But that is kinda the answer to your comment in a strange way. :)
Darn, I'm all caught up and was hoping this was the end! I didn't want it to end but now you realize that I have to WAIT for more! :D
You really have peaked the interest with this tale, I cannot wait to see how things progress and why she appears in his time and if he can save her!
At first I thought maybe you were going to do two parallel stories with him in her time and vice versa. This is a lot better I guess and way less confusing!
Heheheh, Emily. Good news and not so good news. This Sunday is the next update for OoT, but I just looked, there are 10 more updates before it's finished. Somehow I thought we were closer to the end than that. That's the trade off for shorter updates, they take longer. :D
When I wrote this story idea down in the late 90's, two women were supposed to land at Cheyenne's feet dead and Cheyenne was supposed to step into the 1890's and find out why they died, meeting Jonas in his own time. But when I decided to make it a Sims story, I thought it'd be more fun to do it this way. I guess either way would have worked. But interestingly enough, I never thought of following both time lines. That would have been confusing, indeed.
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